I don't have the photography chops to give a proper critique, but I will say that I do think this is well composed, judicious use of color, and I LOVE you've left the natural skin textures intact, specifically in the pelvic region where others would have shopped that out. This image is gorgeous to me.
+10 for not photoshopping her belly. I hate those "smooth" girls that look like mannequins. I'd write you a whole critique but i'm in a terrible metal shape today. Don't want to write something stupid. So just one tip: ask the model to loose the silly shoes.
The composition is strong, pose is alluring, hair and m/u and the lighting all work really well... but I'm wondering if you used a gold reflector to boost the radiance of her practically flawless might increase the pop. Perhaps a wider f-stop (with an ND) to blur the LA skyline slightly more.